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Self Introspection Essay


Introspective Writing: What to Avoid

Your introspective statements are the most important aspect of your essay. They speak for your logical and deductive reasoning ability, your ability to extract necessary relevant ideas from events, your self-awareness, and your attention to detail.

If you peruse our website, you may have seen mention of the 40/60 rule over a dozen times: 40 percent story, 60 percent introspection. While it is important to carefully tailor and craft your stories and examples for the prompt, what really counts is what you make of these stories and examples. You can tell the most interesting story the reader has ever read—maybe you hiked Mt. Everest or became a concert pianist when you were only ten years old—but merely telling a story is not going to get you into your dream school. Instead, you should constantly aspire to answer the question: So what? By training to climb the tallest mountain in the world, did you learn how to face challenges bravely and tenaciously? Did you learn strong work ethic and the value of persistence at a young age while practicing to become a concert pianist? How have you acquired skills that have helped you in other facets of your life?

The following is a series of errors for you to avoid while writing introspectively. If you steer clear of these, you should be able to come up with some solid introspective ideas for your college application essay.

1. Don’t Have Any Unsupported Statements About Yourself

We have found that many of our students tend to describe themselves with unsupported brags such as “I am skilled with working with people,” or “I am a great student.” However, these do not qualify as introspective statements without concrete stories and examples supporting them. Instead of bragging, select stories that portray you as someone who works well with people, and then in your introspection explain the specific qualities that you have developed and applied.

Take a look at Sloan’s Introduction:

I have always been a really dedicated student. I believe I should be accepted to your university because of this rare but important attribute. I will dedicate myself to my studies while also being involved in many clubs as I am currently. I’ve always believed in the mantra: If you can dream it, you can do it.

This is one big boastful introduction. Sloan has made many empty claims and neither provided support nor gave any indication that she intends to provide support for these claims in her body. Contrast this with William’s introduction on a similar topic:

My GPA doubled in the course of two years while I was in high school. This happened as soon as I learned the high standards for acceptance into a Veterinary Medicine program after college. After trying many different methods, I learned how to set a goal for myself and work towards achieving that goal one small step at a time. Working towards improving my GPA, I have benefited threefold: exposure to interesting and timely research material, solidifying my interest in biology, and most importantly exercising my patience and perseverance.

Like Sloan, William also says many positive things about himself, but they are all supported. He does not brag by claiming to be a 4.0 student; instead, he explains how he has become a good student and the things that he has learned as a result: new exposure, strengthened interest in biology, and perseverance—all claims that will be even further supported by his body paragraphs.

2. Don’t Be Vague

When you use extremely vague terms such as “good,” “great,” “nice,” it comes off, well—as BS. You need to be able to cite examples of what precisely makes you so “good.” If you are claiming to be a good basketball player, is that owed to your team-working capabilities or your dribbling speed? Are you a good student because of your diligence or your attention to detail? If you can take your statement and copy and paste it into someone else’s essay, then it is not specific enough and has little informative value. Indicate your specific and unique positive attributes.

Take a look at one of Dennis’ body paragraphs:

Another thing that I’m proud of is that I’m really well-rounded. I can engage people on many different topics that I have learned about over the years. This prepares me for college where I am sure to meet and interact with a variety of people and professors. Furthermore, over the course of four years I can expand my knowledge base further, helping me get ahead once I graduate. While most people have one or two specific interests, I have been able to expose myself to a range, leaving open many possibilities.

After reading this paragraph we do not know anything about Dennis except that he is confident. He does not explain what it is that makes him well-rounded, or how he has worked to become this way. He does not use any concrete examples, making him seem untrustworthy and uninteresting.

Compare it with one of Beatrice’s body paragraphs:

I have always kept myself busy with a variety of activities—tennis, ballet, piano, and art club were all activities that I had engaged in during a typical school week.  Although at times, it felt like it might be a lot to handle, my busy schedule has positively impacted me in many ways. From ballet and piano, I have learned diligence and perseverance. When I played doubles in tennis, I learned how to work as part of a team. Lastly, painting and sketching has helped me learn my creative capabilities and has inspired my interest in architecture. I feel that each of the hobbies that I developed over the course of the past four years has fundamentally contributed to who I have become as a person.

Beatrice is also well-rounded like Dennis, but instead of proclaiming herself as such, she tells us specifically what makes her well-rounded. She spends the paragraph demonstrating all of her interests and experiences, noting each quality that she has developed as a result. This will leave a better impression with her reader than making empty vague claims.

3. Don’t Use Superlatives (e.g. the best, very, most)

In a formal piece of writing, you should be most careful absolutely never to use superlatives (see what we did there?). Why? Because hyperbolic language is not believable and has no place in a persuasive essay. We all have a friend who eats at the best restaurant every day and whose absolute favorite movie is every movie. We soon learn to take everything they say with a grain of salt. Do not be that person—avoid superlatives at all costs.

Take a look at Lynette’s concluding paragraph:

After working hard for four years and constantly improving myself, I became the best student in the class. I was always winning awards and receiving recognition for my academics as you will see outlined in my résumé. After implementing the work ethic that my parents instilled in me I am confident that I am the most qualified candidate for your university.

While Lynette’s accomplishments are impressive, her writing makes her come across as a rather arrogant and unpleasant person. Other students would not want someone like this as one of their peers, and professors would certainly not want someone like this in their classes.

Compare Lynette’s conclusion with Steven’s:

I will always be grateful to my parents for instilling in me the importance of hard work. Although there were multiple subjects in school that did not come easy, such as Chemistry and Geometry, I was able to focus and allot the necessary extra time to learn and work at my weaknesses. I will implement this value in college in pursuit of an engineering degree—something I recognize will not be easy, but will be well worth the time and effort.

Without any superlatives, Stephen presents himself as a humble and hard-working student. He has unrealistic expectations neither of college, nor of his own abilities.

In a Nutshell

Try to avoid these three don’ts and you should be in good shape for writing introspectively. Remember to pay particular attention to this crucial aspect of your writing since it showcases your qualities optimally to college admissions officers.


Self Reflection on Decision Making Essay

1474 WordsDec 14th, 20126 Pages

Problem Solving and Decision Making Workshop: A Self Reflection

I found the workshop on Problem Solving and Decision Making not just useful but also interesting. When we graduate and find work in organizations as Human Resource (HR) managers, we will be faced with many situations on a daily basis that will require us to make sensible, accurate and fair decisions. It could deciding which person to hire, which supplier to use, or which strategy to pursue, but the ability to make a good decision with available information is vital. To be able to do this we need to understand the processes of decision-making and how one can try to eliminate bias while doing so.

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According to Jackson (1975) the first step to making decision is problem detection. Once this is done, identifying the facts and relevant information is crucial to make this process a success. When we reach the stage of selecting the appropriate option, we have another vague problem of rationality. What is “best” to one person may not be to another individual. Rationality also takes into account ethics in decision-making. Not everyone follows the same ethical principles. According to Robbins (2010), there are three ethical decision criteria namely utilitarianism, focus on rights and focus on justice. These can help solve some of the vagueness associated with the decision making process.

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